Saturday, September 01, 2012

A Moment Before the Send Button …


She paused when she read he is typing,
Words found way on the other end of chat window,
Hear beats raced on both the sides,
But then he hit the backspace key and let the fire mellow.
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“Let’s meet up buddy for our old time’s sake
Forgetting our recent past.”
A cancel button later that stamped on this initiative,
And the sms lay unnoticed in the inbox draft.
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“It has been long since we have talked
And I thought an email would be a good start”
A pause after this beginning and he hit the backspace key,
And his dad missed the chance to write his part.
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He reached his idol’s twitter handle,
To convey his gratitude, poured out his feelings.
Closed the window since the message was too clichéd.
Seldom reached the words that were genuine, that were healing.
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Dwelling in inhibitions, living on assumptions,
Think ‘grapes are sour’ and join the fleet.
Let’s take our chance to express ourselves,
So that fate declares the status as ‘Connection Complete’.

2 comments:

Mili M.G. Chandy said...

The intrinsic meaning behind the poem is truly powerful. However, the flow of thoughts is missing. The connection between the sentences is missing. This connectivity needs tweeking, perhaps think about the clarity behind each thought in the sentences. The connection, between those very sentences (thoughts) , to allow your flow of thought to freely intertwine to get that very message across...
A pleasure to read despite the rough edges.
Thankyou.
Mili here from Chennai... SatvaLokha Centre of A. O. L.

P. S. Perhaps someday I will share my poetry with you! ��

Nimish Inamdar said...

Thanks for the honest comments Mili Of course I remember you. You were in the first batch of the Twitter training that I ever conducted...after looking at the way you were using Twitter I designed a small program to educate users on how to use social media for social good. I will always remember that training. I will surely look into your feedback and see what needs to be done for future compositions.